高考英语作文抢分攻略：考前必知五大高分特点！(3)
三、条理清楚，行文流畅
《考试大纲》中对写作部分的要求是"考生应能：（1）清楚、连贯地传递信息，表达意思（2）有效运用所学语言知识"。 考生在写作中应尽力做到：明确写作目的，正确把握写作内容。内容条理要清楚，行文要流畅，表达要地道。如果条理不清，行文没有逻辑性，必然影响考生得分。
【典例3】假定你是李华，你校将接待一批来自美国的中学生进行为期两周的交流活动。现在，学校正在为他们征寻寄宿家庭（host family）。请用英语写一封信提出申请。内容包括： 1.家庭基本情况；2.英语水平； 3.相关经历。 注意：1.词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【思路分析】根据写作要求，考生应写一封申请信，向学校介绍自己的家庭情况，希望能入选寄宿家庭。申请信的第一段应表明写作目的：申请成为寄宿家庭。第二段陈述自己的家庭具备的各种优势，包括家庭基本情况、英语水平和相关经历等；第三段表达希望获准的愿望。
【学生习作】
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the host family that you have been searching for these days. Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I am friendly and helpful. I can communicate with native English speakers fluently. I am eager to make friends with foreigners so that I can learn more about Western cultures. My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong. Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life. I once volunteered to work for an international organization with my classmates, which is of great benefit to my English. I sincerely hope that I can apply for the host family. Yours, Li Hua
【名师点拨】
第一段陈述了写作目的,但是缺少写作背景，显得非常突兀。考生应首先做自我介绍，然后陈述写信的目的。第一段可改为：Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I hear some American students are coming to study in our school for two weeks and some host families are needed. I am writing to recommend my family.
第二段本应有条理地陈述自己家庭具备的优势。但是，考生的写作思路不清晰，内容显得杂乱无章。"My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong."一句不符合写作提纲，纯属废话。"Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life."一句意义过于模糊，没有说清楚自己家庭具备的条件。结尾也没有很好地呼应主题。 根据写作提纲，第二段可改为：I think my family is qualified. To begin with, I am friendly and helpful, which helps me to get along well with others. Second, I speak English so fluently that I have no difficulty communicating with the native speakers. In addition, we have an extra bedroom, where the visiting students can stay. More importantly, an English student stayed with us last year, so we know how to receive foreign guests. 首先，使用主题句点明本段大意，然后用To begin with, Second, In addition和 More importantly陈述提纲要求的内容，而且前后连贯，衔接紧密。 最后一段可改为：My family hope you will give us a chance. Looking forward to your reply. 这样总结前文，呼应主题。
《考试大纲》中对写作部分的要求是"考生应能：（1）清楚、连贯地传递信息，表达意思（2）有效运用所学语言知识"。 考生在写作中应尽力做到：明确写作目的，正确把握写作内容。内容条理要清楚，行文要流畅，表达要地道。如果条理不清，行文没有逻辑性，必然影响考生得分。
【典例3】假定你是李华，你校将接待一批来自美国的中学生进行为期两周的交流活动。现在，学校正在为他们征寻寄宿家庭（host family）。请用英语写一封信提出申请。内容包括： 1.家庭基本情况；2.英语水平； 3.相关经历。 注意：1.词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【思路分析】根据写作要求，考生应写一封申请信，向学校介绍自己的家庭情况，希望能入选寄宿家庭。申请信的第一段应表明写作目的：申请成为寄宿家庭。第二段陈述自己的家庭具备的各种优势，包括家庭基本情况、英语水平和相关经历等；第三段表达希望获准的愿望。
【学生习作】
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for the host family that you have been searching for these days. Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I am friendly and helpful. I can communicate with native English speakers fluently. I am eager to make friends with foreigners so that I can learn more about Western cultures. My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong. Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life. I once volunteered to work for an international organization with my classmates, which is of great benefit to my English. I sincerely hope that I can apply for the host family. Yours, Li Hua
【名师点拨】
第一段陈述了写作目的,但是缺少写作背景，显得非常突兀。考生应首先做自我介绍，然后陈述写信的目的。第一段可改为：Im Li Hua, an eighteen\|year\|old boy. I hear some American students are coming to study in our school for two weeks and some host families are needed. I am writing to recommend my family.
第二段本应有条理地陈述自己家庭具备的优势。但是，考生的写作思路不清晰，内容显得杂乱无章。"My parents are both teachers and they teach me right from wrong."一句不符合写作提纲，纯属废话。"Although were not as rich as others, we live a comfortable life."一句意义过于模糊，没有说清楚自己家庭具备的条件。结尾也没有很好地呼应主题。 根据写作提纲，第二段可改为：I think my family is qualified. To begin with, I am friendly and helpful, which helps me to get along well with others. Second, I speak English so fluently that I have no difficulty communicating with the native speakers. In addition, we have an extra bedroom, where the visiting students can stay. More importantly, an English student stayed with us last year, so we know how to receive foreign guests. 首先，使用主题句点明本段大意，然后用To begin with, Second, In addition和 More importantly陈述提纲要求的内容，而且前后连贯，衔接紧密。 最后一段可改为：My family hope you will give us a chance. Looking forward to your reply. 这样总结前文，呼应主题。
